Commenting on Youtube videos is a new experience for me. I have never commented on any Youtube video. I never even really bother to look at comments on videos so this who assignment has opened my eyes into the world on commenting. It is actually pretty cool to go through comments and see how people react to a video. I watch a lot of videos that some may find offensive, so it's funny to go through and see people who don't find the video funny and write such hateful things. 
      I think this assignment has given me a new perspective on commenting and what goes into it. I've noticed that people write either really hateful comments or really nice comments, both to get attention from the user who put the video up. It is a really interesting thing to observe. Now I find myself going through comments to see what people are saying about videos.


 

      That picture is basically what I have been looking like for the past few weeks: Stressed! Not only for this class, but for all of my other ones as well. I guess this is a good thing because I once heard someone say, "Life is like math- if it is too easy, then something is wrong."
       This week in class, we met with our groups to go over the second draft of the Twitterive assignment. At that point, my second draft was not completely done, but I had the gist of what I was going to write. Each of us shared whatever we had done with each other. I explained that my story was about a girl who is addicted to technology not such an outdoorsy person but is convinced by her roommates to get out and go apple picking. She has a good time and wants to take a picture to remember the day and gets caught by Amish police and is sent to Amish jail. They both seemed to think the idea was good. I informed them that I was not to sure on how to end my story. Unfortunately, they were not too helpful with this. No one really had an idea on what would be a good ending for it. 
      At this point, I was nervous that I was not going to be able to come up with a good ending to bring my story to a close. I knew that I wanted to end with the lesson that technology is a burden and that people need to stop being on it constantly, but it was hard coming up with coming up how to get there. 
      As of now, I have  few different ideas on how to end the story. I am getting feedback from my friends and family to see which one fits best. I also want to go back and add background details to my story, so the reader can know about the relationships between the characters. Although the third draft is due on Tuesday and I will have to present it to the class, I don't think it will be fully done by then. I think I will want to go back to it to make it even better. 

     While in the process of writing my twitterive, there are many things to keep in mind. Number one is how am I going to make all o this into a well written story that is going to be fun and entertaining.  Although I am not exactly sure if I have accomplished that yet, I know that I have filled the important criteria of a story, which is Who What, Where, When, Why and How. By figuring out those questions, it has helped me get the basis for my story and now all I have to do is tweak it around to make it into a great story that everyone will enjoy. 

Who is the main character?:
The main character of my story is a college girl named Lindsay. Every since she got her phone for her birthday, she has been attached to it. Always updating her Facebook status or posting selfies on Instagram. Lindsay is not a fan of going out, unless she is driving to the mall, going out to a party, or tanning at the beach. 

What is the story about?:
The story is an adventure/comedy about Lindsay stepping out of her comfort zone. Her roommates, Stella and Carly, force her to go apple picking with them, which she is not too happy about. They run into trouble on the way and end up having to go to an apple picking farm in Pennsylvania. Without knowing, they end up at an Amish apple picking farm. Lindsay ends up having a great time and wants to take a picture to remember the day. An Amish police officer catches them and confiscates Lindsay's phone and throws them in Amish jail. 

Where does the story take place?:
The story starts off at their apartment at Rowan University. They travel to Pennsylvania to an apple picking farm. Then it takes place in Amish jail. 

When does the story take place?:
The story takes place in present day. On a Sunday in the fall. 

Why does the conflict happen?:
The conflict of the story occurs when Lindsay takes out her phone in the middle of the apple picking farm to take a picutre. The Amish people do not believe in technology and are enraged when she takes the picture. 

How does the conflict happen?:
The conflict of the story occurs because Lindsay took out her phone to take a picture, unaware that the Amish community is very against technology and picture taking. 

      For my Twitterive assignment, I really was not sure as to what direction I was going to go on. The first hard decision was actually deciding where I wanted to go for my foreign place. After making that decision and tweeting about it, now I have to decide what direction I want to go on with it to make it into a story. I really had no idea what I should do. 
      Trying to brain storm ideas, I was stressing. I was hoping that I could get some help from my teacher. During the class meeting with my teacher, Mrs. Kopp, she was very helpful in guiding me on what to do with my second draft. We discussed some possibilities in which my story could possibly go and there was one idea that really stood out to me.
    My second draft is going to be a story about A girl named Lindsay who is not the outdoorsy time and is very reliant on technology, especially her Iphone. After much begging, her friends convince her to get out of the house and go apple picking with them. All along the way, they run into difficulties, such as getting lost or the place not being open, convincing Lindsay that leaving the house is never the right choice. However, her friends did not give up the fight to convince her that it's a good thing to be outdoors. They search for a new place but the only one that was open was in Pennsylvania. They were on a mission to persuade Lindsay. They finally arrive at the apple picking farm and see that the people running the place were all in Amish clothing, but they did not think anything of it. Lindsay is hesitant at first, but after a while, she starts to enjoy herself. She even puts her phone away. Later in the day, Lindsay wanted to Instagram a picture of them with the apple trees in the background. They pose to take the picture and all of a sudden, someone walks up behind them. 
"Excuse me ladies but I am going to have to confiscate that phone and you all have to come with me."
The man turns out to be an Amish police officer and takes them to Amish jail. What's going to happen to them? How will they escape and get back home? You will have to read my twitterive draft 2 to find out. ;)